Editing of Title Sequence and Feedback

This week, we showed our teacher Mr Ford our title sequence so he could see what it looks like and if we need to improve certain bits of it. There is a particular shot where Matt (our antagonist) throws down a set of keys on a table, Mr Ford gave us feedback on this certain shot because it looked a bit distorted due to the image of the keys being zoomed in quickly as a separate shot. This made the title sequence look messy as it looked like the two shots did not flow into each other well, therefore Mr Ford suggested that we just get rid of the shot of the keys zoomed in and to just leave it of the keys being thrown down on the table. Another piece of feedback that Mr Ford gave us is that during the pin board scene right at the beginning of our sequence, there are pictures of both Lily and Katy, there is a close up shot of Katy during the title sequence and Mr Ford said that from an audiences perspective, it looks as if Katy is the target instead of Lily and that is not what we are aiming for. Those are the two main pieces of feedback that we need to challenge. We need to work together to plan when and how we are going to fix these problems and what changes we are going to make. Tomorrow, we are meeting together to challenge the pin board scene again and we are going to focus on printing and pinning up more pictures of Lily so that from an audiences perspective, it looks like that she is the target and not anyone else.